Proposal

I started out with one the questions you said in class because I thought it was a really good one.  I'm having trouble with a couple things though.  My thesis statement ALWAYS kills me when I write papers, Does it look like that thesis statement could lead to good information?  Also, I think trying to find a source can be hard.  The one I have helps a little bit in the first couple of pages, but does not give me any substantial evidence to what I'm talking about.  I'm thinking I'll talk about the people who have changed him along with his hierarchy that he lives by.